Quadrille for dVerse and New to Me Poetry: Cold

Shadow

Lost in the dark

No smiles soar my spirit

The light bent to your grace and whim

‘Til one day you flew away and things changed

Now my face warms from stolen sun

Yet joy eludes my thoughts

I liked the cold

Shadow

For Quadrille Monday at dVerse. The challenge is to write a poem using 44 words and I decided to do it in Rictameter Verse. The style is explained here, but it is a relatively simple form. However the trick, as always, lies in the execution. The only requirement is a strict syllable count: 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2 with the first line repeating as the last line. The style can be rhyming or not depending on how you feel. I went with non-rhyming and I hope you enjoy.

J. Milburn

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14 thoughts on “Quadrille for dVerse and New to Me Poetry: Cold

  1. LOVE that “stolen sun,” especially.

  2. Interesting form! Especially liked The light bent to your grace and whim…

  3. We do have that tendency to warm ourselves in stolen sun… maybe it’s better to be cold sometimes.

  4. Wow. Using a specific form with just 44 words,. Well done. 🙂

  5. It is indeed strange how attached we get to the cold.

  6. I like the form and how you drew cold through the entire poem around the sun.

  7. From shadow back to shadow: an interesting journey.

  8. Love that stolen sun and cold shadow ~ Nice to meet you at D’verse ~

  9. I hadn’t heard of Rictameter before – it’s an interesting form to combine with a Quadrille – and what a line: ‘Now my face warms from stolen sun’!

  10. Shadows oF liGht
    tUrn cOld
    FAll
    LEaves
    SpRing
    oF heArt
    liGht..
    Summer’s
    DreAm Rises..:)

  11. Great poem and I like this form.

  12. I like the effect that this form has on the poem read aloud….building and lengthening the thoughts and then gradually fading back. Very interesting!

  13. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Combining it with that form is very effective!

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