Carpe Diem Special: Classic Haiku

photo credit: Liz West

Icicle glistens
defiant of the sun. Splash!
robin shakes feathers
 

Chèvrefeuille has a new blog for his Carpe Diem Specials called, appropriately enough, Carpe Diem Haiku Kai Special. For his first special with the new blog, he’s sending us back to the classics: haiku by the rules.

1. Describe a moment as short as the sound of a pebble thrown into water; so present tense;
2. 5-7-5 syllables;
3. Use a kigo (or seasonword);
4. Use a kireji (or cuttingword);
5. Sometimes a deeper spiritual or Zen-Buddhistic meaning;
6. First and third line are interchangeable and last but not least
7. No Self, avoid personal or possessive pronouns (I, me, my); it’s an experience not how the poet feels about it.

Let’s see if mine fits number 6.

Robin shakes feathers
defiant of the sun. Splash!
Icicle glistens
 

I think it works, but I’m biased 😉 Kigo, check. Kireji, check (I think). 5-7-5, check, check, and check. Present tense moment, check. Sometimes a deeper spiritual on Zen-Buddhistic meaning, I’ll leave that for you to decide.

Head on over and check out the new site to get your Carpe Diem Special fix!

Hope you enjoy.

Happy Reading and Writing!

J. Milburn

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12 thoughts on “Carpe Diem Special: Classic Haiku

  1. The zen feel my be the early arrival of the robin. Good haiku.

  2. It definitely works! I’m the robin feeling the cold splat. Brr!

  3. Yep, it definitely works very well both ways!

  4. Awesome haiku … all rules checked … and that interchange works great in my opinion. 🙂

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