photo credit: Liz West
Chèvrefeuille has a new blog for his Carpe Diem Specials called, appropriately enough, Carpe Diem Haiku Kai Special. For his first special with the new blog, he’s sending us back to the classics: haiku by the rules.
1. Describe a moment as short as the sound of a pebble thrown into water; so present tense;
2. 5-7-5 syllables;
3. Use a kigo (or seasonword);
4. Use a kireji (or cuttingword);
5. Sometimes a deeper spiritual or Zen-Buddhistic meaning;
6. First and third line are interchangeable and last but not least
7. No Self, avoid personal or possessive pronouns (I, me, my); it’s an experience not how the poet feels about it.
Let’s see if mine fits number 6.
Robin shakes feathers defiant of the sun. Splash! Icicle glistensI think it works, but I’m biased 😉 Kigo, check. Kireji, check (I think). 5-7-5, check, check, and check. Present tense moment, check. Sometimes a deeper spiritual on Zen-Buddhistic meaning, I’ll leave that for you to decide.
Head on over and check out the new site to get your Carpe Diem Special fix!
Hope you enjoy.
Happy Reading and Writing!
J. Milburn
Great one!
Thanks!
The zen feel my be the early arrival of the robin. Good haiku.
Thank you!
It definitely works! I’m the robin feeling the cold splat. Brr!
I felt it today as I shoveled the driveway. May we both experience warmth again very soon! Thanks for reading!
My pleasure. Here it rained, and I imagine ice is on the menu for tomorrow since the temps will be plummeting.
Yep, it definitely works very well both ways!
Thanks! I was hoping it did.
Wonderful!
Thank you!
Awesome haiku … all rules checked … and that interchange works great in my opinion. 🙂