DP Challenge: Haiku 2-Rose

Roses waft in air

Blade strikes! Stem breaks, petal falls

Prick! My finger bleeds

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My second attempt at Haiku for this week’s DP Challenge. Criticism is more than welcome. I’m trying to utilize kigo, which are words linked to different seasons, and heavily used in haiku. Let me know how I’m doing in the comments.

Happy Reading and Writing!

J. Milburn

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12 thoughts on “DP Challenge: Haiku 2-Rose

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  3. I contemplated the last one, but couldn’t get the meaning of the last line about a door taking the life. This one, seems to me, that the finger prick is due payment for clipping the rose from its rooted plant 🙂 (Trying desperately to not let Poison’s “Every Rose Has Its Thorn” get into my head. Noooooo!)

    • Not to worry about the last one. In my last post for the challenge, I explain the thought process behind all the week’s haiku. They are all written, but only one is as straightforward as it seems 😉 Thanks for reading and commenting! It is always great to hear from you, Janna.

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  9. […] Day 2- On the surface, this seems straightforward. Of course, I had something completely different in mind when writing it. “Roses” serves as a kigo for summer, but also a metaphor for love because if I can’t over-read my own stuff, who will? Love is in the air, when words cut like a “blade,” and damage that love. So you can guess that “Prick!” has two meanings. He bleeds, showing that when we cause damage to loved ones, we also damage ourselves. […]

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