DP Challenge: Haiku

Dark falls on scarecrow

Bonfire rages, fighting chill

A door took my life


My first attempt at haiku for the DP Challenge. This week’s challenge: Write five haiku during the week. It can be five in one day, or one each day until Friday, or any variation in between.

Criticism is more than welcome. I can’t improve without feedback. Hope you enjoy and I’ll see you again tomorrow for another go.

Happy Reading and Writing!

J. Milburn

19 thoughts on “DP Challenge: Haiku

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  2. Requires some contemplation to uncover meaning. The last line is a jolt!~ thanks for visiting. Gail

  3. The first two lines definitely gel nicely, but the third one is conceptually like crashing into a curb while riding a bicycle. That appeared to be your intent, to give the reader a sudden pause and cause to reread, although I failed to find any cohesive flow on my second, third, and fourth passes. The phrase itself “A door took my life”, with its double extended oo’s, the snatching feeling brought by the ‘t’ and ‘k’ in “took”, and the resignedly mournful “my life” rounding it off, is very stirring none-the-less. Perhaps, after giving it some time to settle and drift about the corners of my mind, I will receive a bolt of understanding as to the unity of the piece. Thank you for posting either way; I enjoyed the read 🙂

    • Thank you for commenting! If that bolt hits, please let me know what you come up with. I’d be fascinated to see how closely your reading matches what I had in mind when I wrote it. On that topic, do you think I should include an explanation after the haiku, or let people draw their own meaning?
      Thank you for reading and for the follow! I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  6. I have considered this DP….although I typically avoid haiku. 🙂

    • I usually avoid poetry altogether, leaving it to those far more talented than I. I decided to challenge myself on this one for some reason (probably a rose-colored glasses remembrance of middle school). 😉
      Thanks for reading!

      • The poetry I try is all free form so I can avoid rules. 🙂 I am not good at counting and repeating and well ya know. lol When taught haiku in school I cringed. I am not a good rule follower. Think I will try this.

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  9. This makes me think of a witch being burned or some sort of sacrifice, which probably has nothing to do with what you meant. 🙂


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  14. […] Day 1- Ah, the halcyon days of Monday. I used scarecrow as a kigo for fall, so the opening line sets up the scene as night during the fall by some sort of farm. In the second line, “Bonfire” serves a double purpose. It serves as another kigo, but also as a metaphor for anger, hence the next word “rages.” The next two words also serve dual purposes and hint at why this person is out in some field. “Fighting” and “Chill”. Not only is he fighting the cold, he is also fighting the cold realization of what he has done. […]

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