Trifecta Week 102-The Best Time To Kick Is When They’re Down

Who ever said life was fair?

I’ve seen too many things walking this stretch of the city. Kids, boys and girls, running from or to something, stumble and fall on their knees in an alleyway trying to score their next fix. Pimps slouch in cars bought on the backs of despair, watching to make sure they receive what they feel belongs to them. Dealers sling their poison a corner over, using craft earned by surviving the streets to avoid being hassled by the infrequent patrols that deign to make an appearance.

Expensive cars, driven by sweaty men working up the rationalization to cheat on their wives, circle the block. Some have already sold their souls and pull straight up to a favorite. Students, old enough to know better, but still stupid enough to care about showing off, slum with society’s cast-offs, hoping to see or experience a story to shock their more straight-laced dorm buddies. Often, they slink back to their parents’ teat without that story.

Those that see the story don’t come back. Sometimes, to their dismay, they are the story.

And you know what? You don’t care. Oh, I hear the bumper-sticker noises that squeak out of your mouths, “But…but, I volunteer at the homeless shelter and I give to charity.” Or, “It isn’t my fault! You make your own choices. You just need to pull yourself up by your bootstraps.” Then you go home, lock your doors, and shower off the filth-feeling from dealing with the dregs while thanking whatever Deity for His beneficence, while expecting praise for putting a band-aid on the sucking wound of society’s underbelly.

Like you somehow did something to earn it. You won a lottery, one you didn’t even enter. Did you ever stop and think about the fragility of life and how, in an instant, you could end up here with the refuse?

“Hey, baby! How much?”

I lean on the car door. “Hundred.”

A girl’s gotta survive.

Word Count: 327

Trifecta Time again! This week:

:  skill in planning, making, or executing :  dexterity

2 a :  an occupation or trade requiring manual dexterity or artistic skill <the carpenter’s craft> <the craft of writing plays> <crafts such as pottery, carpentry, and sewing>

plural :  articles made by craftspeople crafts> <a crafts fair>

:  skill in deceiving to gain an end <used craft and guile to close the deal>

  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
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Happy Reading and Writing!

J. Milburn


14 thoughts on “Trifecta Week 102-The Best Time To Kick Is When They’re Down

  1. Really gritty! Well done! And yeah, noticable! 🙂

  2. I always look forward to your posts. You come up with amazing stuff. This one is no exception, especially: “expecting praise for putting a band-aid on the sucking wound of society’s underbelly.” Wow. Powerful.

  3. You describe well the parts of society that most try to pretend isn’t there. Like the POV of the girl working the streets. Life sure isn’t fair…

  4. This is good and raises some interesting topics for discussion.

  5. Love how you put your reader right on that corner and thrust the dirty reality of it at them. On a personal note, I would leave off the last line, your piece raises the question so well I don’t think you need to ask it so bluntly. Really great write. Thanks for linking up and don’t forget to come back and vote!

  6. I love being in the hooker’s mind, even though I didn’t know it, till I got to the end of the story. The bile that she spews throughout is excellent – a good capture of someone’s life caught in a long, slow spiral. Very good.

    • Thank you for reading and commenting! I wanted to leave clues as to the narrator’s identity without explicitly saying it until the end, and I’m glad you liked it!

  7. I really like the way you write. The words flow so well.

  8. This is excellent! The voice is so real and perfectly executed. Even though you tell the reader upfront the narrator is someone who knows the streets–the prostitute’s POV is a great twist. Didn’t see that coming. Really enjoyed this piece!

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